Personal Statements - Essays
Overview ~ Brainstorming ~ Writing ~ Editing ~ Additional Information
- Grammatical rules
- Sought Characteristics
- Sample Personal Statements (for medical school)
- Sample Personal Statements (for podiatric and optometric school)
OverviewPersonal Statement: Sometimes referred to as the “statement of purpose” or “personal essay,” is your opportunity to state who you are, where you come from, what you are passionate about, how you ended up at your current career choice, and where you want to go in the future. You must tell the reader why you are pursuing a career in _________ and what you are passionate about.
Essays: Many health schools also have secondary/supplementary applications on top of the general application you fill out. These secondary applications usually include specific long-answer essays. Many of the pointers on this page will apply not only to the personal essay, but to the long-answer essays you will find on these secondary applications.
What do Admissions Committee Members Look for in the Statement?
Admissions Committee members, when they read your personal statement, will be looking mainly at style and content. Remember, they will read countless applications and essays in a short time and, as a result, many of the admissions readers will skim personal statements. Consequently, you need to be concise in what you say and not repeat yourself throughout the essay. You should try to use key words and action verbs throughout your statement. Also, you should try to capture the reader’s attention by describing any out-of-the-ordinary or interesting experiences you have had, provide insight and original thought based on what you learned, and tell your personal story. Caution: Do not over-criticize the profession.
If you can, try to incorporate warmth and feeling into your essay so that the reader is able to tell that you are a compassionate, caring person. Remember, this is a statement about you: therefore it is okay to use the word “I” and to keep the focus on you. Do not provide so much detail that YOU get lost in the essay. The essay should also show your sense of humanity so that admissions officers see you as someone who would be valuable not only to the medical profession, but to their institution as well. Think of writing this essay as if you were writing a newspaper article in the sense that you want to answer the “who, what, when, where, why, and how” of you and your journey into medicine.
Brainstorming Think about what kind of information you want the admissions committee to know about you that is not fully described elsewhere in the application. There may be some overlap with information in the application, but it will be presented in a different way.
The following are some ideas that might help you get started in brainstorming/writing your personal statement:
- What is your first recollection about medicine? What was your reaction to it? Or, what was your first experience dealing with some serious health-related dilemma (a parent diagnosed with cancer, etc.)?
- Who do you know who is in medicine? What do you like, respect, admire about that person?
- Why do you want to be a physician? Why not something else?
- Who is your role model and why? What have you learned from this person?
- What is the most memorable experience you had in the medical profession?
- I’m the dean of the school—why should I let you in?
- What are two things about you that make you different from anyone else you know?
- When did you discover your interest in the medical field?
- Why are you interested in medicine?
- What academic strengths do you possess? For example: above-average grades, leadership roles in specific courses, teaching assistant/lab assistant experience, tutoring.
- Are there some extraordinary circumstances that may need to be discussed? For example: your grades suffered in a particular semester/year because of a demanding work schedule, illness, or family problems. Before you venture down these roads please speak to your advisor or a professor as we may be able to address these issues more safely in our letter.
- What honors/awards have you received? For example: scholarships, awards bestowed by an organization of which you are a member, recognition for work in the community, the dean’s list, honors.
- What research activities have you participated in? For example: research assistant, slide prep, data entry/analysis, and survey development/administration.
- What extracurricular activities have you participated in? For example: membership/office in a campus organization, membership/office in a professional/ community organization.
- What volunteer experience do you have?
- What relevant work experience do you have?
- What specific areas of interest do you have within the health field?
- Why will you make a strong addition to this program? What strengths do you bring with you?
- What are your career goals once you complete your education?
- Have you had meaningful life experiences: jobs, travel, Peace Corps., that would make you stand out from the rest?
**Make a list of all the information you want the admissions committee to have about you. Organize the items on your list into groups of ideas that seem to fit together naturally.
WritingRead the question carefully. Many times applicants have their own agenda and forget to focus on the question asked of them. After you are finished writing an answer, reflect on your question and make sure you have answered it fully.
Write when you write and edit when you edit! Your first draft should be straight from the heart, brutally honest, and inclusive of all the information you think will be useful to the admissions committee; you can edit later.
Do not just write what you think they want to read. If you do this, it will sound too contrived and give the impression that all you want to do is impress them, not express yourself and who you are.
Speak from your heart; trying to convey an honest representation of who you are is the best policy. You can’t fabricate a person who does not exist, nor is this the type of person they would want to admit to their institution!
A personal statement should be a reflection of your personality. By reading your personal statement the admissions committee should be able to develop a better understanding of you. An effective essay lets the reader know you would be an interesting person to interview and potentially a valuable addition to the institution. They may also go to your personal statement when reviewing your application to get an overall sense of you as an applicant. Be sure it functions as the “glue” that brings all aspects of your application together into a cohesive application.
Consider the readers of your application. Admissions committees are made up of persons who are proud to be associated with the profession, and are the gatekeepers of the profession. Do not overly criticize them, their professions, or the health industry. If you feel like you must point out some flaw you have discovered in your journey and that flaw is perhaps why you want to join the profession, make this statement in a way that makes it sound more like an inspiration or motivation and not a criticism or critique of the profession or health system. Also keep in mind that non-science minded people may read your essay. Avoid being too technical and scientifically-wordy when writing about YOU.
No whining and no excuses—do not write a laundry list of personal problems. The essay should be upbeat, illustrating how you have turned adversity to strength and/or pain/sorrow into motivation. An explanation is always better than an excuse and owning up to your own contribution to academic problems is a better way to go than blaming someone else or not taking ownership of what you did to contribute to a problem. Avoid the unusual, at least in the presentation of your essay. A personal statement in the form of a ceramic yucca or haiku is not a good idea.
Be specific and provide details. Your details and experiences are what make your personal statement unique and will impress the reader. Document your conclusions with examples and do not make general, far-reaching statements.
Do not laundry list your accomplishments and experiences without addressing how those experiences helped you determine your career objective or helped you to better understand yourself and your role as a potential healthcare provider. Otherwise, your list will not only be similar to your resume and what your evaluators write about you, but it will also make you appear egotistical. Everything in your personal statement should have a reason for being included. Formulate conclusions that reflect the meaningfulness of your experiences.
Be prepared to write several drafts and get an early start. Waiting until the last minute is never a good idea and will give you a personal statement which might be good, but could definitely be better and more refined. After you have written your statement, set it aside for at least a day or two and then revisit it. When you read it again, you may be in a different frame of mind and will be ready to revise.
Organize your ideas logically. Many personal statements are organized chronologically. Other statements are organized by topic (e.g. history, academic background, experience, and community service) or by theme or thesis (e.g. what will make a good healthcare professional in the year 2010 and how/why you would be that person). Whatever style you choose, it is imperative that you provide the reader with some reference points so that s/he does not have to spend time sorting out your information.
Set the proper tone. Remember that this is your chance for them to know you more personally and you should take full advantage of this opportunity. Try to avoid the use of clichés, slang and/or sentences or phrases that give a conversational or chatty tone to your essay. Remember: you are writing for professionals, so be professional in your choice of words and sentence structure.
EditingVary your sentence structure from time to time to keep your reader interested. What works is variety: controlling the rhythm of passages through the mixing of short, long and intermediate-length sentences.
Do not try to be clever or humorous unless you are absolutely certain you can pull it off with finesse. An application to medical school is serious business and an admissions reader is not going to want to admit someone who does not seem serious about medicine. Keep it professional.
Use the active voice. Put the spotlight on you rather than on someone or something else. (Weak: I was employed by the hospital to assist… Better: I assisted in the examination of…)
Watch for sentence fragments, run-on sentences, dangling phrases or ideas, and the occasional random tangents.
Use action-packed, descriptive verbs and be careful not to switch tenses. Avoid ending sentences with a preposition (e.g. with, of).
Do not be unnecessarily wordy. (Weak: After the course was finished, I was sure that I wanted to spend my entire life in daily contact with the world of medicine.
Better: That course convinced me my future was in medicine.)
Make sure your statement is organized and avoid redundancy. If it is too long or rambling, it will appear undisciplined, out of focus, and unrefined.
When using acronyms, give the entire name when it first appears followed by the acronym in parentheses.
Have several people review your draft—friends, family, faculty, and staff. They may know some things that you omitted, and may be more objective and give you an honest opinion of how you are coming across.
This is an exercise in perfection. Poor grammar, spelling, punctuation, and incomplete sentences are not acceptable under any circumstances and will weaken your application.
Additional InformationGrammatical Rules
Sample Personal Statements (Medical School)
Sample Personal Statements (Podiatric/Optometric School)
In this article, Medical School Personal Statements that can beat 52,323 Applications, you will learn to create a sincere, interesting, and thoughtful essay that highlights your strengths and qualities.
With more than 50,000 applicants to medical school this year, only those with a compelling story will be selected to interview.
While metrics, such as the MCAT and GPA, are crucial, admissions committee members view applications holistically meaning who you are and what is important to you matters just as much as your “numbers.”
We’ve got you covered:
Below are some strategies you can employ that will help you stand out from the crowd.
Let’s get started:
Whether you’re applying to AMCAS, TMDSAS, or AACOMAS essay prompts are generally not topic-driven like a traditional essay you might write for an academic class. So let us guide you to understand Medical School Personal Statements that can beat 52,323 Applications.
Keep in mind:
We encourage applicants to try and write a topic-driven essay that has a distinct theme.
“I have a great theme, why I want to be a doctor.”
Of course, from time to time, a student might write a beautiful essay with a theme, but, most of the time these essays do not succeed in telling an applicant’s story comprehensively and convincingly.
Related:Too Early to Start Working on Your 2018 Medical School Application? – When to Start Your First Draft
I don’t have anything to write about.
Of course you have a story.Everyone does.
Here is a list of questions that can help a student find key elements of his or her story.
How should you start your medical school personal statement?
You hear conflicting advice. Some tell you not to open with a story. Others tell you to always begin with a story. Regardless of the advice you receive, be sure to do three things:
1) Be true to yourself. Everyone will have an opinion regarding what you should and should not write. Follow your own instincts. Your personal statement should be a reflection of you, and only you.
2) Start your personal statement with something catchy.Think about the list of potential topics above.
3) Don’t rush your work. Don’t panic. Composing great documents takes time and you don’t want your writing and ideas to be sloppy and underdeveloped.
Medical school personal statements that can beat 52,323 applications.
SHOW, DON’T TELL
Know this mantra:
Something my clients hear me say throughout the application process, and a common mantra for anyone who works in admissions, is to “show” rather than “tell.”
What does this mean, exactly?
It means that whether you are writing a personal statement or interviewing, you should show evidence for what you are trying to communicate.
Here’s an example.
In a personal statement, never say that you are compassionate and empathetic; instead, demonstrate that you possess these qualities by offering concrete examples.
Medical School Personal Statements that can beat 52,323 Applications via GIPHY
Also keep in mind:
Like your personal statement, your interview responses, too, should evoke all the qualities and characteristics that your interviewer is seeking. Again, show don’t tell.
And consider this:
The following is a medical school interview question, “Tell me about your most valuable shadowing experience and why it was important to you.”
Hit them with this kind of answer:
“My most valuable experience was shadowing Dr. Brit. I really learned so much about oncology, which I found fascinating. I would go home every night and read about what I had heard and learned. But I also enjoyed watching him talk to patients. I noticed that he held each patient’s hand, listened to them attentively and made clear to each person that he really cared.”
And there’s more:
By talking about his mentor, this applicant shows his understanding of the importance of compassionate care, and in expressing this, further suggests that these ideals are important to him, too.
The mantra “show, don’t tell” cannot be said enough. Remember this throughout every stage, written documents and interviews, of the medical admissions process.
Where can I find further inspiration? Need help with your personal statement med school?
1) Click hereto visit the Student Doctor Network website to find out how other students are preparing to write their personal statements.
2) Click hereto see what students on the Reddit medical school personal statement premed forum are saying about their personal statements.
3) Your application materials must be authentic, but sometimes a little inspiration helps. Read The MedEdits Guide to Medical School Admissions. There you will find examples of ‘successful’ personal statements and application entries.
I would like more resources about medical school personal statements and how to apply.
RELATED: What to Watch out for in Medical School Interviews
Where should I look?
For those of you who love to drink coffee and stay up until the roosters come out.Here’s a great “go to” list where you can read about more personal statement and application topics.
1) Click here to visit www.AAMC.org to learn about AMCAS, the allopathic (M.D) application service.
2) Click here to visit the American Association of Colleges of Osteopathic Medicine website to review important requirements for your AACOMAS application.
3) If you want to apply to most medical schools in Texas, you will need to complete the TMDSAS application. Click here for more information.
Personal Statement for Medical School Myths
Personal Statement Myths:The list below is based on an article I wrote all the way back in 2010 for The Student Doctor Network.I guess some solid advice never gets old.
#1: Never write about anything that took place in the past or before college.
#2: Never write about topics unrelated to medicine.
#3: Never write about a patient encounter or your own experience with health care.
#4: Always have a theme or a thesis.
#5: Don’t write about anything negative.
Click here to read the article on SDN.
Example Personal Statement
Synopsis: A first generation college student learns from family illness. This personal statement is an excerpt from The MedEdits Guide to Medical School Admissions, P. 162.